The Fate of Rose

 Hello my dear readers,

Today we had to do an assignment in class about a documentary called "Surprising Europe". The following story is one of many covered in this documentary.

Hello, my name is Rose and I’m a prostitute in Genoa, Italy. I originally come from Nigeria and I dreamt of a good life in Europe with a well-paid office or cleaning job. Back in Nigeria, I went to school and had a job but I was promised more by a friend of the family. So I quit both and left my family, lured in by the promise of a better life. However, life in Europe was different than expected, as I was forced into prostitution. At first, I got into a lot of fights with the "family friend" because I am very religious and selling my body is against my beliefs. All the fighting brought me nothing as I had to support my family at home and I was told that I had to pay off 45,000 Euros of debt. So I stayed there and I have been in the business for six years now. My worst fear is that I will never get out of debt and that I am forced to work until I am old and "worthless". I knew girls who had exactly that fate. They were sent back old, without money, unable to find a husband and they had to live the life of an outcast. In the end, prostitution comes down to earning money but losing yourself.

What the EU is for: Analysis

Hey guys,
you don´t have to read this post because it is a rewritten version of my first post with this name. I needed to revise the paragraph for my English class.
                                                                                                                                                              

Paragraph Brainstorming:

• register > changes throughout each paragraph, probably because of the two authors
• structure> good organized, clear, ideal length for paragraphs
• cohesion> cohesive without using too many linking words
• vocabulary> academic but not too complicated and high-registered

Original paragraph:

While reading the academic text “What the EU is for” I found both good and rather confusing points about the text. The first positive point I spotted was the good organized structure of the text. Short headings for each section of the text give an impression what the paragraphs will be about. The paragraphs have the perfect length. Their length is convenient for the text, so that the reader does not have to concentrate for too long. I really appreciated that the text was cohesive, although the authors did not use many linking words. The vocabulary was easy to understand but some sentences were too long, which disturbed the flow of the text. I suppose that this disruption happened because of the different types of register the authors used.  When I started reading I did not know that this text had two authors. After reading one paragraph I was convinced that at least two different people must have written this text. All in all, the text is well-written and an English student can definitely learn a lot by analysing the text.

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Feedback:

language> wanted to write in British english, wrote one word in American english

structure> two sentences had to be connected to secure the flow of the text

2nd version paragraph:

“What the EU is for” is an academic text and combines both good and rather confusing points from which language students can learn quite a lot. The first positive point I spotted was the good organised structure of the text. Short headings for each section of the text give an impression what the paragraphs will be about. The paragraphs have the perfect length, which is convenient for the text, so that the reader does not have to concentrate for too long. I really appreciated that the text was cohesive, although the authors did not use many linking words. The vocabulary was easy to understand but some sentences were too long, which disturbed the flow of the text. I suppose that this disruption happened because of the different types of register the authors used.  When I started reading I did not know that this text had two authors. After reading one paragraph I was convinced that at least two different people must have written this text. All in all, the text is well-written and an English student can definitely learn a lot by analysing the text. 
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Feedback: 
I changed the "and" in the first sentence to a "which",erased the comma before "so" in the third sentence 
and wrote the word "aspect" instead of  "point".

Final version:

“What the EU is for” is an academic text which combines both good and confusing points from which language students can learn quite a lot. The first positive aspect I spotted was the good organised structure of the text. Short headings for each section of the text give an impression what the paragraphs will be about. The paragraphs have the perfect length, which is convenient for the text so that the reader does not have to concentrate for too long. I really appreciated that the text was cohesive, although the authors did not use many linking words. The vocabulary was easy to understand but some sentences were too long, which disturbed the flow of the text. I suppose that this disruption happened because of the different types of register the authors used.  When I started reading I did not know that this text had two authors. After reading one paragraph I was convinced that at least two different people must have written this text. All in all, the text is well-written and an English student can definitely learn a lot by analysing the text.

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How I combine the EU with my interests!

Although many people may be under the impression that the EU is a boring topic to write or study about, I would say it is a challenging theme. I knew from the beginning that I wanted to combine my topic with Asia, since most of my regular readers know about my obsession for Asia, my choice shouldn't`t surprise any of you. Please tell me which topic sounds the most interesting!

 Asia’s economic relations with the EU:

The essay would include a short impression about the economic state the two countries were in, before they cooperated with each other. After that I would provide information about how they became trading partners and when. Which trading contracts they have and how the partnership changed the economy of both states.

The EU-Korea free trade agreement:

Due to my stay in South Korea and the Lectures I attended at university, I gained an insight on the economy of Korea. The Republic of Korea isn`t even half as old as the EU and the EU, still had to fight over 5 years to make a contract with South Korea. They decided on trading all kind of goods without taxes. This contract was a huge success for the EU because the Asian makes about a quarter of the European Import and Export up. I would also like to give special examples of how beneficial this trade relation is for every EU-citizen.

                                                       Japan-European Union relation:

Japan is an even more interesting trading partner for the EU than Korea. In the Japan- European Union relation it`s said that the EU and Japan not only exchange products but they also share academic- and civil-society contacts. During 2012 Japan and the EU started talks about technological exchanges too. In my essay I would be describing the whole situation first, to get an overview, and later I would be focusing to work out the advantages and disadvantages and possible problems.

Immigration of Asians in EU countries:

I am not yet sure but I would probably concentrate on one certain EU-state. The essay would deal with the reasons of migration from Asia to the EU. During which periods most immigrants arrived, taking in consideration the various historical happenings which led to migration. After arriving which cultural differences caused problems and whether migration increased or decreased?

Why was Germany able to be one of the founder states of the EU shortly after the second World War?!

Why was Germany able to co-found an institution like the EU, although their economy was highly unstable? Who was the political at this time and which thoughts and preparation can be found behind the founding of the EU? Who were the other heads of the states? How and how much did the economy of the founding states changed within 5 years?

Thanks for your help! J